I may have mentioned I tend to watch Spartacus (the tv series on Starz) while writing the first few chapters. The first chapter takes place in the Roman Republic and the second chapter takes place in Jerusalem during the crucifixion of Jesus. In these chapters, I use the same type of speech that they use on Spartacus.
For example- Ilithyia:
First you tie my hands and then you seize my fucking tongue?
I would not have it flapping about absent direction.
And this is an example from chapter 2- Eva flicked her hand dismissively
and pursed her lips at Lehi. “Close mouth or find tongue absent. I seek not your
approval. I know of what I do and I know of my path. I do not need,” Eva looked
Lehi up and down in disapproval and smirked, “your words upon my ear. Cease speaking and return to beloved wife.
There is much to do.”
Mine is a bit lacking as compared to the show, but I think I make my point in the differences of speech.
So my rewrite of chapter 2 is done and so now I can return to editing the rest of the book. I've got many chapters to go.